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Nowadays most people are not as fit and active , as they were in the past.What are the main cause of this situation ? suggest some possible solutions .

Fitness is
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not only the
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 of god but
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it’s depend
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 on human activities . In recent days , a very large majority of individuals are not worthy nor dynamic
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 they were in beyond .There
are
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 some major reason
first
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 one is adulterated
food
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 and lacking
of
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physical labour. In our daily life
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most
are
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 the
food
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 are not same as before . we use different types of chemical fertilizer for produce foods as well as Increasing their rotting deadline different kinds of antiseptic without
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any rules.
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morphin
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morphine
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 which is used only in laboratories for biological sample preservation . Researcher claim that it is
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ain cause of cancer as well in
grow
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 obesity in human being . Not only
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 fast
food
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 are
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 responsible for hampering fitness.
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 era are afar from physical work, most of
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ystem are computer and robotics base.
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Day labour is complete a work in 1 day alternatively a robot is finished
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in one hour . The
person
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 who never sweats will never be an energetic
person
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 is proved by scientist
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 most of the individuals don’t follow it . For overcome from
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every
person
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as well as
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g
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overnment should aware
about
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this
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food
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 and fast
food
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 . Administration ought to strict in their rules.Every
person
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have
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 to workout
atleast
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at least
 one hour in
d
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ay .Social awareness need to
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uildup for
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ast few decades to till now everything is changing very rapidly. In
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 flow,
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onsciousness of health should keep in mind.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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