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There are different customs in different countries related to how people eat, dress, and so on. Some think that people visiting a country should behave according to customs of the country they visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many argue that people should act in accordance with the culture of the place they are visiting, It seems the more most apt thing to do while on vacation.
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 essay will look into the importance of respecting different cultures and traditions of different people when we abroad, and opine my opinions in conclusion.
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 with, there are certain countries whose cultures are completely opposite of the rest of the world.
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, In Saudia Arabia, women and men are required to wear modest clothes whenever they go out in public. So whenever, a person visiting from abroad is visiting the
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, it is important to be respectful towards the law of the
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 and abide them.
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, when people visit another
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, its mostly to explore their culture and
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, many tourists visit Thailand mainly for their unique
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 taste that they cannot find elsewhere, so I believe its ideal to eat local
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 while we visit a new
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. But it's not necessary to adhere all the customs, like taking the example of Saudia Arabia, it is compulsory for Saudi women to wear hijab in public, but if we are visiting in the
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, we should not change our appearance just to blend in it.
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, many people try to adopt the language by copying the local's accent, which can in many cases offend the locals and they find it as their mimicry.
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 people trying to learn Arabic words but not pronouncing it clearly might tick off many Arabs. To sum up, I believe, it is good to adapt to local culture by eating their
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 and being respectful towards their religious beliefs but we have to be careful while doing so that it should not look like we are tyring imitate them.
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