A GROWING NUMBER OF PEOPLE FEEL THAT ANIMALS SHOULD NOT BE EXPLOITED BY PEOPLE. HENCE, THAT THEY SHOULD HAVE THE SAME RIGHTS AS HUMANS. so, WHILE OTHERS ARGUE THAT HUMANS MUST EMPLOY ANIMALS TO SATISFY THEIR VARIOUS NEEDS . HENCE, INCLUDING USES OF FOOD AND RESEARCH. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

#people #animals #rights #humans #food #research

The sentiments in favour of and against animal usage for various human needs have always remained in the forefronts of discussion.

This

write up will attempt to debate both views, thereby arriving at a conclusion. From time immemorial, early man has been using animals. Especially employing them to satisfy his basic needs of food, clothing, hunting, transportation etc. While cattle rearing for food and diary needs become the

best things known to man. But, after agriculture, he started domesticating animals

such

Add an article

show examples

og for security, donkeys and bulls . So, as beasts of burden, horses and elephants as transportation vehicles etc. As time progressed, man found several other avenues wherein animals could partner with him for progression . Specifically, of the human race

such

as research, medicine etc.

However

, some sections of the society are against the usage of animals for any need, whatsoever.

For instance

the PETA (People for Ethical Treatment of Animals) activists. They hold nationwide protests to create sentiments in

favor

Change the spelling

favour

show examples

of animals.The famous Salman Khan’s

black buck

Correct your spelling

blackbuck

show examples

case booked the actor for harming endangered species.

Similarly

, Jallikatu protests banned bull race in Tamil Nadu.

Also

, with the objective of eliminating or minimizing cruelty on bulls. I personally feel that animals are very much a part and parcel of

the

Remove the article

apply

show examples

human civilization .

Also

Add a comma

show examples

mankind will be incomplete without their association, support, and contribution. Mankind should be benefited by them. But,

however

, the right checks and balances should be in place to ensure

Add an article

the

show examples

revention of their exploitation.

Submitted by hayrapetyan2004 on Wed Nov 18 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS writing?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

251 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

Topic Vocabulary:

Exploitation
Animal welfare
Ethical treatment
Vegetarianism
Veganism
Cognitive dissonance
Humane
Live stock
Cruelty-free
Bioethics
Conservation
Habitat preservation
Ecosystem
Biodiversity
Animal testing
Synthetic biology
Genetic engineering
Speciesism
Animal husbandry
Sustainable farming

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
Many people believe that the most effective way to teach students to cooperate with each other is to play team sports at school. From my point of view, I agree with this view and think that student will be more cooperate with each other when they play sport together. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in detail.
5
band
Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
In recent years, controlling residents’ infrastructures has been a heated debate. While allowing the citizens to exercise greater control over the construction of houses and working spaces has a number of benefits, there are also a few significant drawbacks that have to be considered. From my perspective, I believe that its positive aspects outweigh the negative ones.
5.5
band
In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In these recent years, it has relatively become common omitting the age criteria from the application form. In other words, nowadays the age of an applicant doesn’t seem to be the main criteria. In my view, I believe it is a positive development.
6.5
band
Some people say that the technology advancement enables people to entertain at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages?
It is widely found that an increasing number of people are able to enjoy entertainment time in their living places due to the development of technology. I believe that this fact has both benefits and drawbacks to human beings, details of my elaboration will be presented in the following paragraphs.
7
band
Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today's society, justice has become a matter of significant concern. Some people argue that criminals should be reintegrated into society while others believe jail is the best solution to reduce the rate of crime in society. In this essay, I will examine both perspectives before presenting my own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people say that the technology advancement enables people to entertain at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.