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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries the salary
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 not
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equally
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 distributed, there are many people who get lots of money and
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 a few people with
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igh salary.
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ead of thinking that the state has a good quality of life because we see the
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 of goods they have.
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, we don't see the
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poverty
 of the state, media
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usually
 shows off only the good part of the state shadowing the poor people who live there.
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, we can consider the positive impact that high salaries could have. Normally,
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 small group of workers are very old and they are paid for the experience that they bring in
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companies. So far, everything
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 right and quite logical. To show what I mean,
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eteran employee can execute the job in less time and in
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effecient
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efficient
 way compare to a junior one.
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, he has to be paid. Turning in to the other side of the argument,
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