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Some people believe that a person's intelligence is inherited from the parents while others believe their environment is the main Discuss both views.which factor do you think is most responsible?

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The major contributing factor to an individual's intelligence has been a debatable topic in society.While some people believe that brilliance is genetically inherited, others argue that the surroundings of an individual
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 of an offspring is the major contributing factor to their extent of smartness.
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etting gives the most important contribution. Genes of wit can be passed from parents to offspring.
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, individuals can inherit a considerable amount of their understanding from their parents. Simply put, "smart parents beget smart children". A study done
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 the University of Washington shows that 60% of mothers who are considered smart have children with an awesome acumen. For
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, the home a person grew up in and friends all affect the smartness of an individual. It is evident that children born and bred in the city are more intelligent than those trained in rural areas. An individual's developing
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 effects majorly on their wit. In my opinion, with the controversy of the factors which contribute most to an individual's acumen, it is safe to say; genes of agility can be transferred to children,
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, the environment in which the person was bred contributes majorly.
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 are contributory factors to brilliance level but the environment tops the chart in importance.
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