Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The concern for which factor is of paramount importance to excellent
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performance is becoming polarized between groups of mental power supporters and physical health favours. In
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essay. I will discuss both views and
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give my conclusion. On behalf of people placing “strong and fit” on top, there is no
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about the role of having a good
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shape and perfect
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condition.
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, a fit
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with high-quality
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index is key to achieve auspicious outcomes,
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it would be very challenging for players to have impressive success in
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rofessional
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world.
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, Olympian swimmers require large shoulder, long arms to facilitate the catch and pull motion that save time and energy, and usually are 6 feet tall; the basketball players need strong legs to have forceful score jumps.
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physical strength helps
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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