It is difficult for many people to create a balance between their professional and their personal life. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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century has everything but time, finding time for personal
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is sometimes so hard for many people that they have to take a personal day just for that. Most people are in
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stressful situations as they cannot find a proper balance between a professional and personal
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situations. There are several reasons as to why people cannot find a proper balance between their personal and professional
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and foremost is the lack of planning, most people have planned for long term goals, but forget to make a plan with their family over the
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weekend. The other cause is the importance, everyone gives their career the utmost significance with the intent of better tomorrow for everyone in the family; meanwhile, in doing so
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precious years with their family. Another reason is the
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competition in the job market, people have to keep on learning new things with the fear of getting replaced anytime; and, many working professionals
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reason have to keep on studying after working hours or weekends to stay updated. The solution to many of these reasons
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not straightforward. One solution which is most effective is that people should start giving the same importance they give to their career, to their family,
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of thinking about how they will make a better future for everyone, thinking about how will they make their today better.
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of buying
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luxurious items, people should invest the same money to make a passive income. By
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way, they can become more financially independent of
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urrent competitive job market, and can surely get more time for their family. In the modern world, it’s difficult to keep one's personal
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professional
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and most of the times giving importance to any of them solely can create
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difficulty and increases stress. So, one must give both
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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