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It is suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is advisable that children should learn how to grow crops and to have pets at home. I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Rearing a child is like a double-edged sword so parents should know how to raise them well and instil appropriate behaviour.  One way of developing a sense of responsibility to a kid is giving them a task to accomplish.
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 will show that parents trust them and are confident in them and children tend to do anything to protect
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 trust. Studies show that a youngster that has a pet at home is more likely to be outgoing and playful. They would take their pet outside for a walk or to play catch together with friends and oftentimes they would be proud of themselves because they can raise an animal and which they can call a friend at the same stage.  
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, if parents would teach their kids to plant vegetables and be able to harvest it on time would give them a sense of fulfilment. They would know the difficulties and the date it takes to produce a certain food. These would give them an idea of conserving resources and developing their patience for it takes time for a plant to grow.
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, having these kinds of activities will nurture a parent and child relationship. For these activities to be effective, adults should be around to protect and guide their children in keeping their domesticated friend as well as owning a farm. A juvenile is still a toddler and needed to be instructed properly. Especially when it comes to animals, sometimes if they are not tamed they can hurt the children and
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 will cause the traumatic experience to a child psychologically and physically.   In conclusion, I believe that children must learn how to care for plants and animals for it helps them to be more productive and it gives them a feeling of reward.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • cultural literacy
  • hands-on experience
  • nutritional awareness
  • curriculum integration
  • time management
  • resource allocation
  • school gardening projects
  • animal husbandry
  • ecosystem education
  • dietary habits
  • work ethic
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