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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? Whay measures can you suggest to make it easier

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A huge number of people often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in
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their
 lives. I strongly agree with
this
 statement for several reasons.
Firstly
, normally people are not prepared to face new situations or
accadiments
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accidents
 in their lives.
Thus
, most of the time people don't have enough time to think
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how to behave in a certain situation or how to act when something
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 to them.
Furthermore
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this
 could lead to an
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 increase of stress that could affect our immune system. To cite an example, recent studies suggest that nearly 50% of people that deal with
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ew situation is stressed during the period when these events
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.
Furthermore
,
this
 problem in settling to new situations could be
also
 due to the social impact.
In other words
, when we meet someone
that is
 not familiar to us we tend to be more confident and be less open to others.
For instance
, when
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 started school
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 found
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ery difficult to create a relationship with others and
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maintain
 that relationship during the coming years.
Moreover
, people should be prepared to face any situation, one of the solutions could be
analyize
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analyze
 all the information and try to guess what is happening.
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