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The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread use of cell phones (mobile phones)? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, increased demand for using
cell
 phones for
business
 and personal reasons. In my opinion, the benefits of using the mobile
phone
 far outweigh the problems associated with it. Admittedly, there are minor disadvantages that use the
cell
 telephone.
Firstly
, a
lot
 of people use a
cell
phone
 during the drive a car checking or writing messages,
also
 very often to speak the
phone
 during driving. I often see drivers on the highway which speaking
cell
phone
 through that, in turn, create an emergency on the road.
Secondly
, for a
lot
 of people the mobile
phone
 to become important than personal communication. Humans prefer often to speak on a
cell
phone
 than meeting and speaking personally. But even, when friends to meet together in a cafe or restaurant they sit and communicate across messenger. I enjoy meeting with my friends and speak without mobile phones it gives us the opportunity to stay human in the insane technology world.
Nevertheless
, despite the disadvantages mentioned above, I think there are a
lot
 of significant advantages to using a mobile
phone
. One of the obvious benefits is that a
cell
phone
 has more useful for
business
 now. Entrepreneurs can rule and control their own
business
 through a cellphone in any place world.
For example
, I always use a mobile
phone
 to rule my
business
 and to make or pay invoices. Another advantage of the cellphone is using him how a photo camera for work or personal purposes.
This
 reduces times work execution and
also
 can capture the perfect moment for the family photo album.
Finally
, using a mobile
phone
 in an emergency can to save a
lot
 of life or protect from the dangers In conclusion, while there are minor disadvantages of using a mobile
phone
 in the personal or
business
, I believe the benefits are greater than the difficulties associated with it.
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