Nowadays, people can easily find and share information online. What problems can this cause and what are solutions ?

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In today's world, people can exchange
data
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through the
internet
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss the cause problem and provide some possible solutions to
this
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issue. In the wake of advancing technology, people have to
become
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rely on the
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internet
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.
For example
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, there are many
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friends'
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friend'
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platforms
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, like Facebook or
apps
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other apps
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. These kinds of
platforms
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also
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expose many
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personal
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that
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would cause
they
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lost
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their
private
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privacy
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.
This
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is because almost everyone can read or watch your profile and some of them might disturb you.
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, these kinds of
platform
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also
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research your
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,
such
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as what you
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interest
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,
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in, what
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what
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and what
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type of
data
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you have searched.
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also
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makes you
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your
private
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privacy
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.
As a result
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, you might see many
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promotions
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or advertisements when you use the
internet
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.
However
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, there are some solutions to fix
this
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problem, like you can adjust the
information
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and set up the private and the safety.
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, before you upload some picture or
information
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to the network, you can filter some of the highest personal
data
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and
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not put them on the
internet
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.
Consequently
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, you can protect your
information
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by yourself.
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, you
also
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can set up
the
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private and
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safety
in
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on
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your home page of the apps or other
website
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websites
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.
This
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can help you to avoid some of the
data
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will be pick up by those
platforms
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.
Consequently
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, the annoying advertisement will not interrupt you and
also
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can protect
the
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privacy
of
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yours
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. In conclusion,
although
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people use the
internet
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to share their
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which
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it
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can cause
they
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them
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lose
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their privacy.
However
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, there are some solutions to reduce
this
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problem by themselves to filter their personal
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and
do
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not
upload
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uploading
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them
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it
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to the
internet
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Moreover
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, the second solution is
set
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up the highest level of safety on their own platform's home page to reduce
their
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the
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information
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will
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that will
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be picked up by those
platforms
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.
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