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Some people prefer to live in a house while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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In recent years, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of people living in apartments while others opine that living in the
house
 has lots of advantages. There are a number of reasons why people have a passion for apartments. In
this
 essay, I will depict them and explain why I think the drawbacks of
this
 trend outweigh the benefits of living in a
house
. Due to the overpopulation across the world,the
land
 prices are skyrocketing. It's very hard to buy adequate
land
 for housing, especially in metropolises. Apartments are constructed in the same building which dramatically reduces
land
 usage. The architecture of apartments is designed in
such
 a way that, they provide a
lot
 of fringe benefits which attracts people. Not only they are available anywhere to buy, but
also
 cheap to buy. Lack of privacy and less ventilation make
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partment a bad choice for people seeking privacy and space. Even if the
apartment
 owned by an individual, it is not that easy to make any desired changes in it because of the shared space. Notwithstanding the aforementioned rationalism, the advantages of living in a
house
 are without its concerns. The primary one stems from the fact that living in a
house
 will give a
lot
 of private space and an individual can design and construct a
house
 on his preferences. Apart from
this
 many residents with green fingers use free
land
 as a garden and enjoy gardening. A
lot
 of people believe that owning a
house
 is an ultimate achievement in anyone's life.
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 but not least,with a
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ventilation and fresh air living in a
house
 can beneficial for health which is extremely important today. Apparently, the disadvantages of living in an
apartment
 seem to be far greater than its advantages. From what has been discussed, one can not only identify the disadvantages of living in an
apartment
,
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 but
also
 understand the benefits of living in the
house
.
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