In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?

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In many countries,children are engaged in some
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of paid
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. Some people regard
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as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable
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experience
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, important for learning and taking responsibility. I strongly believe
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something necessary and useful for children for several reasons.
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, when children are engaged in paid
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they could be independent of asking
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to their parents. Most of the times children perform a small and easy task
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most useful to their parents, even if by doing so, they could still be able to be independent. To cite an example, when I was young I used to perform small tasks
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as cleaning or washing stuff for a small amount of
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, week after week, I was able to afford and buy a new bike just by myself.
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, recent studies suggest that children that have done a small
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of job in their early years are more motivated and could reach better results.
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, we need to take into account that
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of activities could improve their
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and can enrich their social attitude. If children are forced to
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in a group, they will learn how to deal with others, how to create and maintain a stable relationship and least but not
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, they could learn how to manage properly their
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, studies suggest that children that deal with
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since their young ages pay more attention to how to spend their
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and as result don't ask for loans in the future.
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, teenagers could be more confident when entering the job market in
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arly years. As they already have
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and know-how they should
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, when I was a teenager, I did an internship with a very well known tech company.
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experience
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helps me to understand how to
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in
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office environment with other colleagues and with supervisors, by doing so I learned how to connect professionally with others in order to maintain
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ppropriate business relationship. To sum up, It's extremely important for young group ages that they get used to
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and to manage their salary. Governments and schools must take measures in order to incentivise
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kind
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of activity. By doing so our future generation could be able to
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better and with better and better results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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