The government and individuals are spending too much money on national celebrations like new year or festivals. Do you agree or disagree?

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Government spending and individuals
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often the
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of criticism in all over the world. Some people believe spending on celebrations is too much money. In my opinion, I disagree with
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vision. Despite the huge amount of investment to make it happen, these events contribute to the economical
growth
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and enforce the sense of
community
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. Celebrations fuels
the
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economic
growth
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. These events usually are created for thousands and even millions of people in order to they can attend and spend money. These
conmemorations
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commemorations
involve
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many services
aroud
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around
the event by employing people and contributing to
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economic
growth
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, Sydney new year celebration
atracts
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attracts
millions of people from several countries.
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visitors pay for
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tickets, restaurants, hotels and many other services during their attendance.
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,
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ustralian economy is able to take the profit from that particular celebration regardless
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how much money they invested. On the other side, celebrations help to enforce
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ense of
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, humans are social animals, the government efforts to
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commemorate
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events
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to increase the sense of to be part of a
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, people are more engaged with the shared values of a particular group of people.
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, every year, Brazil invest millions of dollars to make an event to recall their ancient traditions. They dance and
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for an entire day. By doing
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, people feel happier and the government spending
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to the meaning of life for many citizens. In conclusion, I disagree with the view of spending on celebrations is too much. From my point of view,
conmemorations
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commemorations
fuel the economic
growth
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of a particular
community
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and
also
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help to promote the shared values of a
community
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