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Universities should accept equal numbers of males and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Gender
 equality is a fundamental problem, dimming people's prospects for building a sustainable future.
Therefore
, some people opine that educational organizations should
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 the same
number
 of both genders.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement and will provide in
this
 essay reasons to support my viewpoint.
Firstly
, accepting representatives from certain
gender
 may lead to loose of real talents
that is
 why universities should accept students on a competition base.
For instance
, it would be unfair to reject
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ale applicant with higher grades and
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etter GPA in favour of female with lower academical performance due to
gender
 quota.
As a result
, students with abilities to study hard and contribute in the future to the development of society may remain uneducated.
This
 is why it can be argued that admission
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commission
 should choose students based on their educational results.
Secondly
, it is irrefutable that
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qual
number
 of women and men in subject groups is unreal due to
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opularity of some professions among women or men. And if there are only
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ew applications from females and dozens of males to create a group would be impossible. A case in point would be engineering, where the
number
 of male students often dominate the
number
 of female students.
Therefore
,
this
 makes it clear that the
number
 of one
gender
 should not be on par with another
gender
. To
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 up, universities should not implement
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ex balance policy as
this
 measure can create more problems.
Likewise
, I disagree with the equal numbers of males and females in every subject.
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