You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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Dear Martha, I hope you are doing good. I'm very excited about your visit to India and can't wait to

finally

meet

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youmeet

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. I've made plenty of plans to show you the best version of my country. Let me know your travel dates. Anyways, I've received your letter, asking me about the trending news on actor Sushanth's suicide, it is quite disturbing to see

such

a young and talented actor end his own life, due to extreme nepotism in the film industry. The whole country is projecting their grief and anger online, after

this

incident, as

this

the

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is the

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3rd similar case connected to nepotism and

film

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the film

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industry. People are really supporting him and pleading

the

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with the

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government to take up necessary actions to end

these

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this

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series of murders. I personally felt terrible with his death because my cousin, with whom I'm pretty close, has been trying her best to be a successful actress,

however

, due to continuous suppression

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people with no film background, she couldn't work anywhere and

affected

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was affected

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mentally in leaving her dream. Hope some action will be taken now as

this

has become international news. Look forward to seeing you soon. Best Regards, Mittu

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