A highly controversial issue today relates to the importance of arts in the school curriculum. While some people believe that studying arts is a waste of time, I would argue that these subjects help children enhance important skills.
On the one hand, I understand why some people argue that schools should not place great emphasis on
as painting, singing, acting. The
reason is that
subjects are likely to offer limited employment opportunities.
graduates tend to work in
-related fields only, which are less stable and diverse compared to non-
professions. Another reason is that not many students are gifted in arts and music, which usually require
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alent for a successful career. If they are forced to study arts, they may not derive enormous benefits from
subjects, ending up not have enough time to spend on other courses in which they interested.
On the other hand
, I would side with those who believe that
subjects offer great benefits to schoolchildren.
, they enhance their creativity and problem-solving skills. In
classes, learners are encouraged to think creatively
of strictly following rules and structures.
, they learn how to utilize available
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in a painting, or interpret a poem in their own way. As creativity and problem-solving are must-haves in many fields, they are likely to be beneficial to
learners later in their life and future career.
, their motor skills are
honed. Drawing or playing a musical instrument requires dexterity and hand-eye coordination.
, children with fine motor skills are more likely to develop independence because they require less support from their parents in some daily activities.
In conclusion, I completely agree that
subjects play an essential role in children’s development because they enhance their creativity, problem-solving skills as well as motor skills. Arts,
, should be more incorporated in the school curriculum.