Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

While Some people say that
music
is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together, I totally do not agree with the opinion. One of the reasons why I disagree with the opinion is that there is no direct correlation between enjoying
music
and bring people together. Bring people together can be possible only if people understand each other and share many things
such
as languages and religion.
Thus
, no matter how many people enjoy
music
together,
music
cannot bring people together unless
this
prerequisite
such
as understanding each other is fulfilled.
For example
, even though many famous songs from the US have been popular in other countries, people in other countries still have different thoughts and beliefs, and many conflicts between the US and other countries are ongoing. Another reason is due to the high barrier of culture. Above all, culture includes diverse meanings from customs to languages, and people have various cultures, which is affected by mainly their nationality and religion. The difference made by these diverse cultures has caused a lot of controversy or war among many countries.
However
, there have been few cases that
music
prevented these conflicts.
This
shows that
music
could not reduce conflicts caused by different cultures.
Furthermore
, the generation gap is caused by several reasons
such
as the level of education, and the gap between generations makes people have different
music
genres. In
this
case,
music
cannot bring people together at all. For these reasons above, I believe that
music
is not a good way to make people together.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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