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Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people harbour the belief that fortune is of paramount in a successful life, but for my part, to achieve accomplishment in life, one needs continuous hard work, though luck does help in some cases. Indeed, fortune can help people achieve their goals.
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 why sometimes fierce competition may make the value of efforts unable to magnify. People still can not achieve prosperity. If there is unexpected happen beyond their ability, like in the human, material, financial and other emergencies, people may get unexpected gains.
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, you have more advantage than your competitor, due to late for or absence, you may get the job. As matter of fact, The above is not a stroke of luck. There are other factors hidden under it. If you are not outstanding you won't have the chance to get into the
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 round of interview. so blessing requires some effort to do the premise. Other benefit factors mean patience is
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 critical. Many aims in life are too immense to achieve it,
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, becoming the best writer, get the best employer etc. Even with a windfall, these things may have to wait. In a word, patience is not a decisive factor in our achievement. Other factors
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 as patience are
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 important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aims
  • determination
  • resilience
  • opportunities
  • effort
  • planning
  • unpredictability
  • innovation
  • perseverance
  • perception
  • sustainability
  • adaptation
  • networking
  • initiative
  • random chance
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