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some children find some particular School subject difficult for example math or philosophy so this subject should be optional rather than compulsory to what extent do you agree or disagree?

it cannot be denied that a
study
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 has become a part of individuals
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 playing a crucial role in their task which they are doing on daily basis. a segment of society thinks that in the schools some
subject
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 should be optional rather than compulsory. I completely disagree with
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 statement I will delve my point in upcoming paragraphs before reaching the conclusion
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 with academic
education
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 play a vital role in children
life
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. without
education
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individuals cannot survive in
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 contemporary era so all
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 should be compulsory in the school for the children
education
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. if children will not
study
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 in all
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then
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 they can not enhance their knowledge in
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ifferent area that will help them in their future
life
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 to get the jobs.
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, sometimes children feel difficulties in Maths
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 and others.they try to change the
subject
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 rather than hard work on that .
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 thing will put a bad effect on their entire
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 not only
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 they will always find optional things in whole
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 that will not be possible.
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, in
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 only possible by the higher
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 and knowledge. with the help of vast knowledge
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person can become multi-talented in the company and get higher salary with that salary person can enjoy the
life
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 and fulfil the all needs and desires
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ndividual can spend their whole
life
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 comfortably.
thus
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 all
subject
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 should be compulsory
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 important for the children. In conclusion, in these days
study
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 and job competition is the higher optional
subject
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 cannot become multitasking the person so in academic
education
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 all compulsory subjects should be taught that would be good for the student future

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