You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _______,

Dear Hassan, Hope you are fine. It’s been a long ago since we met each other, till you settled abroad. But soon I’ll be with you. I’m writing
this
letter because I need your precious advice about a part-time
job
after my shift to the UK. You know that I got admitted to
2-year
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a 2-year
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bachelor program at Kings College London.
And you
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You
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are
also
glad to know that my studies module is
part-timetime
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part-time
and I have been permitted to
part-timetime
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do a part-time
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job
. In
this
regard, I need your help. I know that
also
faced issues in
beginning
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the beginning
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but now you are a well-established person. Please advise what type of
job
could I get and how could i manage my studies
while
doing the
job
. You know my family background and why I
choose
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a
part-timetime
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part-time
study program. In fact, my first priority is my education and my
job
is necessary to resolve my financial problems. I hope you never let me down and encourage me towards a rightful path to achieve my goals. Looking forward to hearing from your positive response. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar
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General
To improve your letter, consider varying your sentence structure and using a wider range of vocabulary. This will make your writing more engaging and demonstrate greater language proficiency.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your sentences within each paragraph are closely related to that main idea. This strengthens the coherence of your letter.
Task Achievement
Detail your study plans more specifically by adding information such as your major, why you chose it, and how it relates to your career goals. This will add depth to your letter and improve task achievement.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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