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Experience is a key factor fro becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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xperience is a key factor for becoming successful. I would like to briefly describe the pros and cons of having relevant
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 especially in the corporate industry and
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, I would conclude by agreeing or disagreeing to it. We live in a
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 world and in almost every interview, one of the questions asked is, how many years of
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 do you possess?
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 is where
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 comes in handy and you have a fantastic chance of being offered the
job
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 and in most cases, candidates who have a rich amount of
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 are selected.
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 depend on their qualification and the skills required to match the
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 role. You might be wondering, what about the ones who do not have any
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, will they ever find a
job
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? Well, they will find a
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 but it will take a little extra time in order for them to kick start their careers.
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 group mainly consists of students who have graduated and are waiting to enter the work kingdom. Even I have been part of
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 group.I still clearly remember applying through many
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 portals and
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 asking my friends, relatives and classmates for leads.
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, nothing really worked out. The good news is, Universities and Colleges have started
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 great initiative of having an internship program.
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 helps the students to have a
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experience
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 of the industry. To conclude, I personally feel it is important to have a certain amount of
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 and I am delighted that educational institutions have understood the importance and have created a platform for students to be able to intern and gain the
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