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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to individuals and society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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news
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 media often give greater
attention
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 to crimes, disasters, political conflicts, and other
emergencies
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 than to positive developments. Many people believe that
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 tendency has harmful effects on both individuals and
society
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. I largely agree with
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 view because excessive exposure to negative
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 can increase anxiety, create a distorted perception of reality, and weaken public trust in
society
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. One of the main reasons
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 trend is harmful is its impact on mental health. People who regularly consume
news
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 filled with violence, accidents, wars, and economic crises may develop feelings of stress, fear, and helplessness. Continuous exposure to alarming headlines can make individuals believe that the world is becoming increasingly dangerous, even when many aspects of life are improving.
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, during major global crises, many people reported increased anxiety after spending long hours watching negative
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 coverage on television and social media. Another serious consequence is that negative reporting can distort
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’s understanding of reality.
News
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 organisations often prioritise dramatic events because they attract more viewers and generate higher advertising revenue.
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, positive developments
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 as scientific breakthroughs, improvements in healthcare, successful environmental projects, or acts of community cooperation receive far less
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.
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 imbalance may lead citizens to underestimate social progress and become less optimistic about the future. In my own experience, I frequently notice that stories about crimes or political scandals dominate
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 platforms,
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 achievements by local communities or students are rarely highlighted.
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, I do not believe that reporting problems and
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 is entirely harmful. The media have a responsibility to inform the public about issues that require immediate
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,
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 as natural disasters, public health
emergencies
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, corruption, or threats to public safety. Without accurate reporting, governments and citizens would be unable to respond effectively to
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 situations.
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, the problem is not the existence of negative
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 itself, but the disproportionate emphasis placed on it. In conclusion, I largely agree that the media’s strong focus on problems and
emergencies
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 can be harmful to individuals and
society
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 because it increases anxiety, creates a pessimistic view of the world, and reduces awareness of positive progress.
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, negative events must still be reported when they are important for public safety and accountability. A more balanced approach that gives adequate
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 to both challenges and achievements would benefit
society
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 as a whole.

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Make your own view even more strong from the start and keep it the same in all body parts.
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Add one more clear and real example to support your main ideas.
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Some ideas are good, but you can explain one or two points a bit more deeply.
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Your essay is easy to follow, but some linking words could be more varied.
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Each paragraph has one main idea, which is good, but a few sentences can connect more smoothly.
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You can make the shift between the agreement side and the balanced view a little clearer.
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You answer all parts of the question and give a clear opinion.
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Your main ideas are relevant and well developed.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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Your paragraphs are in a logical order and easy to follow.
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Topic sentences are clear and help guide the reader.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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