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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since many ages have passed, "Health is wealth" is one of the greatest sayings. In
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 modern era, every
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 faces its own challenges. Some people believe that every
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 should have a free
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 while on the coincide, some people believe they are too expensive. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides. The future of a nation is in the hands of the people. If people are healthy
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 a
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 will grow more. People's taxes run a
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 and some feel that
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service
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 should be free because if people will live healthily and happily. They will be able happier to pay taxes. To illustrate
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, Canada has free
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 and it is ranked as one of the happiest countries in the world. On the contrast side, some people believe that
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service
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 should not be free because it adds a chunk amount of taxes on all the people and it becomes more expensive for countries to run. If a
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 will be spending a lot of money on its people
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 how a
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 will grow in terms of the global ranking. To exemplify, America is the greatest nation in the world and it does not have free
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.
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 of spending money on its
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,it spends money on the defence system and army. To nullify
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esponsibility of the government to take care of its people. The should be a minimum fee for any treatment but people should not be going in debt as well for
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 services. In the end, people are paying taxes and the best to invest taxes it to invest in people.
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