Many parents (mostly women) decide to stay home and take care of the family members instead of going out for work. Some people suggest that they should be paid by the government for doing that. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

A lot of parents, especially women, make the choice of not having a job to dedicate their time looking after their family, and many people think that they should receive subsidies from the government. I somewhat agree with
this
point of view, as I believe that being a full-time parent must be a choice that should not be based on financial consideration, and people who decide to stay home to take care of family members in need are actually releasing pressure from the health system. Money is often the source of problems for many couples. The parent who decides to stay home should not be financially dependant from the one who is working.
Otherwise
, It would create a disparity in the couple that could lead to unhealthy relationships and would not benefit the children, which is the main idea behind full-time parenting. As previously mentioned, one could
also
decide, or must-have, to take care of an elderly, or another family member with disabilities.
This
is often a better solution as it is more comfortable for the people in need, and will avoid to clutter up the health system.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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