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Some people believe that the government should be responsible for taking care of the disadvantaged members of society like unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people insist that the
government
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 must take adequate steps to improve the living conditions of marginalised
society
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. I completely agree with
this
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 view as the poor and the destitute need
government
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 assistance to be part of the mainstream. There are multifarious reasons to strengthen my viewpoint.
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, the
government
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 is elected by all the citizens of the country. So, it has to cater to the needs of everyone in
society
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. More importantly, the
government
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 has to put in extra efforts to lift the living standards of the paupers and the destitute. In fact, every
government
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 in the world dreams of an egalitarian
society
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 and
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 design can only be fulfilled if the
government
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 takes the responsibility to aid unemployed and homeless people with jobs and shelters respectively.
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, other than providing employment and housing the
government
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 has to take the responsibility for the health and education of the vulnerable
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. Making them more educated and giving robust healthcare definitely improve the economic condition of the country in near future.
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, there are a few people who express apprehensions over the financial burden on the country if the
government
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 earmarks funds for the underprivileged. I believe it is a short-sighted view as the unemployed on giving jobs become part of the workforce, eventually ramping up the productivity. In conclusion,
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 providing aid to the unemployed and homeless puts pressure on the economies, it is of utmost importance to blur the lines of inequality. Because of all these fundamental reasons I firmly believe that the
government
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 must take active steps to ameliorate the living condition of the poor.
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