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"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

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Advancement in technology and science has made an exorbitant influence to the current society
this
 has made a huge impaction on the health sector. I totally agree with
this
 opinion, the notion of preventing a disease is better than treatment is highly acceptable but
this
 generates the question whether it really ameliorate the spread of incurable diseases and pandemics or will it be always possible to prevent disease. To embark on, nowadays, there are many inimical diseases like, malignancies which are inevitable even with the advances of science no proper treatment have been discovered, each year thousands of lives are being lost.
However
, if these diseases could be identified before-hand by screening and proper medical check-ups early they could be cured but yet these treatments are expensive. Despite, society can be addressed to deteriorate their unhealthy life manners
this
 will be a prophylactic measure which can be taken to avoid the development of incurable diseases.
Furthermore
, pandemic situations could be mitigated if proper sanitary regulations are being followed , in fact, developing a vaccine would be costly since it has to go through all phases of development and its time-consuming.
Hence
, the pharmaceutical sector is not always successful, as human beings,it would be wise if we show some concern on our own bodies and to take actions to prevent deterioration of well-being. Despite, it is not always possible to stop the development of unpleasant health conditions in
such
 case pharmaceutical aid would be needed. Even though there are many illnesses which are uncurable if proper strain and facilities are being provided to researchers it would not be impossible to find a proper treatment. To conclude, it is always wise to prevent sickness rather than treating it. To make
this
 possible government should economical support to pull up the individualist participation to deter humans from developing any inimical health issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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