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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today, there are taxes on almost all the items people buy and there are different types of them
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, property
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, value-added
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, etc. Duty cuts are essential for the overall development of a country,
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, I believe that high taxes can cause some hiccups. Some of
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hoese issues are, increase in the price of basic commodities like vegetables, fruits, grocery items, etc. If an average earner cannot afford these basic necessities
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 he/she might step into unlawful acts which lead to the hype in the crime rate. Another example is that the property taxes are constantly increasing, which when not paid on time result in confiscation of the property by the government and listed for an auction.
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, regular duty cuts from the salary go to the development of the nation as
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 money is invested in building roads, hospitals, public transport, etc. All these facilities are availed by individuals on a regular basis regardless of how poor or rich they are. Taxes are
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 utilised in providing to the education system, which trains and carve the future of the children.
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, there should be a limit on the percentage of
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 cut according to one's salary and for people who are unemployed they should be exempted from taxes.
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, there should be only one type of duty for every realm,
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, VAT(value-added
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) was introduced in the
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 year in India towards which people have shown their disapproval. They have been already paying sales
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 on every new purchase and value-added
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 topped on the manufacturing cost of the items. To Conclude, In my opinion, taxes are vital for the advancement of a country and
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 it assists is providing essential means, but if
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 is cut in high amounts
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 it hinders the basic development of a person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of salary
  • Necessary public services
  • Economic growth
  • Quality of life
  • Redistributing wealth
  • Discourage
  • Motivation and productivity
  • Favorable tax conditions
  • Infringement on personal freedom
  • Balanced approach
  • Progressive tax system
  • Economic activity
  • Financial growth
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