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Some people think that people should be given right to use fresh water as they like. Others believe governments should control toughly over the use of fresh water. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Water
 is one of the most valuable natural resources, as it sustains human life. Unfortunately, there is a problem of
water
 shortage, but
this
 is not new, but a portion people today assert that it is necessary to ensure the
use
 of
this
 resource is under the strict control of governments. Due to the higher demand of
water
 for industrial manufacture, daily life, and
further
, preventing the destruction of dependent hydro-ecosystems, freshwater which is theoretically deemed as renewable, will, if consumption at present rates continues, run out one day. What is worse, the abusive
use
 of
water
 is common to see on farmland, in factories and the household.
Therefore
, supposing that governments take no actions to deter a
water
 crisis, what would happen in the future? Would human beings be able to
use
water
 as they like? In order to combat the deteriorating situation, it is believed authority is supposed to regulate the maximum quantity of consumption in industrial production and adopt high-technology aimed at recycling used
water
 on farmland.
On the other hand
, it is fair to say people do have the right to
use
fresh
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water
 as they want. The main reason lies in that any restrictions might lead to poor sanitary conditions and the spread of diseases.
In addition
, it lowers people’s living standards and causes a lot of inconveniences.
For instance
, showers are only available at certain hours of a day; flowers can only be watered once a week. In summary, from my perspective,
although
 the budget for advancing
water
-saving technique aggravates a government’s financial burden, it is their obligation to tackle the issue. Apart from the measures to control the consumption on
a large-scale educational campaigns
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 should be held to instil awareness of the public need in saving
water
 in public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Human right
  • Resource scarcity
  • Economic productivity
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Equitable distribution
  • Monopolization
  • Public health
  • Sustainability
  • Government regulation
  • Hygiene
  • Water quality
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