There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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ariety of

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music

kinds of music

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have been developing around the nations. Both traditional and modern

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still becoming

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usic industry until now. In my opinion, both genres are important and have their own impact

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the community. The reasons why people need

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essay.

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of all,

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is one of the sources of enjoyment which has been attracting people since the old days. The combination of the tones, sound of instruments and

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rhythms

produces a pleasant sound to the heart and many people enjoy

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sensation. Since the ancient generation until now people included

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in any kind of events

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as festival, birthday celebration and wedding ceremony. The

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reason

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is needed because it is used as

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important

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in a

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ritual. As we can see in the churches, temples or even in a mosque,

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is played as the compliment

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of the pray.

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is believed as the

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catalyst

of the pray to reach

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apply

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God in

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Heaven faster. Comparing traditional

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of a country and international

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that is

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heard by most of the folks recently is unfair. Traditional

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And popular international

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have their own

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and

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used for different purposes. Traditional

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part

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of the history and culture of its nation.

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, it usually plays in national

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occasions

or an event where cultural things are introduced to the other nations. Meanwhile, global

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is a genre which

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well known because most of the society like it and it does not relate to previous history or heritage of

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pecific country. It often plays in radio, television programs and social media platforms and becoming more famous because people keep plays it. Overall, in my opinion, in the future

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both genre will still be played by many people and they will keep

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them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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316 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

emotional release
cultural significance
globalization
cultural exchange
technology
preservation
cultural heritage
social cohesion
expression
consumption
production
traditional music
international music
diversity
identity

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In some countries, more and more people are becoming, interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people resarch this?

Social media has replaced the traditional method of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and follow news and events. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

You stayed at your friend’s house when you participated in a business seminar in the other city. You mistakenly left a file with important documents at their house. Write a letter to your friend, describing the file, tell them why it is important. ask him/her to return it to you by post.