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obesity has been found to be a serious health hazard the world over , over the past few decades. what are the causes behind it and what are the effects of it on various sections of the community?

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There is no gainsaying the fact that
obesity
 has become prevalent in the world over recent years causing several health hazards to individuals.
This
 intends to analyze the reasons behind
this
 phenomenon
,
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and would look into the effects it is going to have on the certain sections of the
socities
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societies
. The most obvious cause of
this
 obese society is the sedentary lifestyle of masses. These days most of the
work
 of individuals in done with the help of machines , and they have no need to do any manual
work
 or physical
work
 owing to that.
This
 has left them with a lot of
leisore
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leisure
 time which they spend sitting with their mobiles and other electronic gadgets which resultantly is making them prone to
obesity
. Another reason behind
such
 a situation is the unhealthy eating style of people. With the easy availability of ready to made eat food, people rarely cook at their homes. They most of the times order it from nearby restaurants or have frozen food at homes which
is
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 filled with a lot
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preservatives and
spieces
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species
spices
 that becomes the cause of their
obesity
. Having
such
 a trend would make masses to have more
obesity related
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 diseases
such
 as diabetes, heart attack in the upcoming years.
This
 has even started to show its effects when we hear youngsters getting heart attacks.
This
 would
also
 be a burden on the governments when they have to provide people with more health facilities for
obesity
. More number of obese people would
also
 mean having less workforce. As it is seen that more the unhealthy any individual more he has to suffer while doing any physical
work
. To conclude, sedentary and unhealthy eating lifestyle is the root cause
behind
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this
 situation. The visible effects it is going to have will be on the youngsters when they need health services , and find
difficulty
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 to cope with physical stress.
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