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Many scientific institutes conduct research on live animals. Some people regard it as cruel and unnecessary while others believe it is justified in the interest of human welfare. Discuss the two views and give your reasons. Give reason for your answer.

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Today we are living in
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 we have conquered over many deadly diseases ,
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 could have been possible only because of many trials and research which have been performed at a different level over live animals. Some people thought that doing an
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 on the animal is doing cruelty over them whereas some thoughts its good to save the human race. In
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 a position where any disease can be cured if proper medicinal or surgical management will be provided to a needy person on time
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 could have been achieved only by research work and trials over an animal ,generally, guinea pigs are used for
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 purpose so that toxicity and benefits of medicinal effects can be studied well,
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 of putting a human being in the endangered situation .Some people think it is cruelty over animal because many a time
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 animal does die and faced many bad side effects so it is not justified on the animal side. Today we have invented
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 effective and advantageous drugs which can save patients from cancer and other diseases
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 could have been able to get only because of research on drugs and experimental trials on animal
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 we could not have been discovered them and now we are saving millions of patients by that drugs
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 to achieve
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 success we have sacrificed many animals on which we have performed the
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 drugs.By doing
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 animal have gone through pain and discomfort too as it happens most of the time in surgical
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 procedure. After observing both the views I think it is not unjustifiable on doing an
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 on an animal because after all, we are bringing a new surgical technique and new drugs for our upcoming generations so that they cannot face any trouble and pain due to their disease we can able to give new and modern and less harmful medicines in
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