Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There draw some immediate action and tactics are concerned that will
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some opine that a large number of resources are consumed to the preservation of wild creatures and birds. In my own’s perspective, I partially disagree with Change the verb form
is
this
view and this
paper is going to cast the light on my views and draw a reasonable conclusion.
On the one side, the act of investing in conservative wild animals is essential in maintaining the balanced
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balance
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apply
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cosystem. The fact that people have been raised their awareness about the harsh consequence of the loss biodiversity, which is Add an article
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hardly
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nly impact directly to their daily life, but Change the article
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to their following generation. For example
, many fisherman
in developed and developing countries Change to a plural noun
fishermen
are witnessed
the reduction in various animal species, which Change the verb form
have witnessed
is play
a crucial role in remain a sustainable food-chain of sea creatures and wildlife. Thereby, it is obligate that people should pay more attention as far asChange the verb form
plays
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to
be remained
effectively a mutual habitat with wild beings.
On the other side, the inconsistent Change to the active voice
remain
have remained
in
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inaction
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of many advocators about the effectiveness and Change the spelling
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practical
of these investments. Replace the word
practicality
For instance
, whilst many young and wild mammals are being lack
of control in natural habitat, many philanthropists are still minimum and limited their Change the verb form
are being lacked
are lacking
action
in some determined campaign like propaganda widely about the result of over-poaching wild animals. Replace the word
activities
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, those campaign
are operated in a nick of time and easier to halt after they have received enough Change the determiner
campaigns
donate
or charitable in public. Replace the word
donations
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activities
these campaign
to Change the determiner
this campaign
these campaigns
rise
the transparency of Correct your spelling
raise
this
group in terms of finance.
To sum up, despite the fact that people obvious seen the necessity of conservation wild animals, the investors and advocators should be support
constantly to the act of remaining and reserving natural creatures and animals. It is a sustainable foundation Change the verb form
be supported
to
the survival of humanity.Verify preposition usage
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite