Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some opine that a large number of resources are consumed to the preservation of wild creatures and birds. In my own’s perspective, I partially disagree with
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view and
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paper is going to cast the light on my views and draw a reasonable conclusion. On the one side, the act of investing in conservative wild animals is essential in maintaining the
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cosystem. The fact that people have been raised their awareness about the harsh consequence of the loss biodiversity, which is
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because it is not
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nly impact directly to their daily life, but
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in developed and developing countries
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the reduction in various animal species, which
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a crucial role in remain a sustainable food-chain of sea creatures and wildlife. Thereby, it is obligate that people should pay more attention as far as
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draw some immediate action and tactics are concerned that will
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effectively a mutual habitat with wild beings. On the other side, the inconsistent
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ction of some people who unstable at their attitudes or their investments on environmental issues raise the
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of many advocators about the effectiveness and
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of these investments.
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, whilst many young and wild mammals
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of control in natural habitat, many philanthropists are still minimum and limited their
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in some determined campaign like propaganda widely about the result of over-poaching wild animals.
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are operated in a nick of time and easier to halt after they have received enough
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or charitable in public.
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of
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the transparency of
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group in terms of finance. To sum up, despite the fact that people obvious seen the necessity of conservation wild animals, the investors and advocators should
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constantly to the act of remaining and reserving natural creatures and animals. It is a sustainable foundation
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the survival of humanity.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Intrinsic value
  • Ecological balance
  • Conservation efforts
  • Endangered species
  • Sustainable resource management
  • Habitat preservation
  • Eco-tourism
  • Job creation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Allocated resources
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Educational initiatives
  • Future generations
  • Wildlife protection
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