Government should make laws about people's nutrition and food choice. Other argue that is their choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There has been a heated debate about whether the government should
implemente
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implement
/
state regulations concerning/
regarding nutrition and food to improve healthier living or it is the freedom of choices of citizens/ this
is the rights of people to choose what they want and how they prefer/
enjoy to live of
their life. In my own perspective, people have the rights to pick up and tasting Replace the word
off
any thing
they want, but in the limitation of legislation. Correct your spelling
anything
This
paper is going to cast the light on both aspects of m
atter.
On the one side, in terms of science, many minor and severe diseases as cardiovascular or massive heart attack are related closely with the consumption of harmful and contaminated foods like processed or junk foods in a long run. Add an article
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Therefore
, enacting the regulations and terms according to the detrimental substances in foods as far as restrict them are p
rogressive concern of many nations. Add an article
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a
For instance
, many Western countries has
restricted and impose a large tax on high contain-sugar foods. The fact that consumer not only less consuming Change the verb form
have
this
kind foods,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
try to find a better choice with more affordable, instead
of the old ones.
On the flip side, the opinion that individuals should be responsible and liable in
manage their health conditions and Verify preposition usage
to
nutritions
. Indeed, to Correct your spelling
nutrition
be succeed
and achieved the goals of Change the verb form
succeed
cut
down adverse consequences of unhealthy eating habit and lack of Change the verb form
cutting
nutritions
are not only require the affirmative of ministry and administrationCorrect your spelling
nutrition
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
need the consistent and affirmative of citizens. If people raise their awareness thoroughly following and watching health-related news, it could be good sources of information to gain their knowledge and broaden their horizon about health problems in connection with wrongfully eating habit and how to ease the detrimental impact of it. Therefore
, Therefore
, the number of patient
who highly potential suffer from severe illness will be restrained at Change to a plural noun
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inimum.
In conclusion, I strongly reaffirmed my view that people can be freely purchased and consumed anything they want to taste and drink under the barriers of law, Add an article
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nevertheless
, they should be careful consideration about the harsh consequences of uncontrollable eating habit to their health conditionSubmitted by Tạ Minh Hiếu on
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