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In the future, nobody will buy printed paper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
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subjects
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 which they do not like. Some people think
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree with
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 statement? In today's competitive world, a broad knowledge
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 to succeed in any field.
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, I disagree that it is a waste of
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 if
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study
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subjects
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 which are not of their interest. Let us first examine the reasons why some people hold the opinion that
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 should not have to
study
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 all the
subjects
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 and should be allowed to choose the
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 they want to
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. They opine that in
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 the
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. In addition, if
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 are forced to
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 all
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, they can easily lose interest in education. What is more, if all
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 are compulsory for studying,
students
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 will not have enough
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 to earn all of them properly;
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, they will be constantly under a lot of pressure.
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, I believe all
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 are of great importance and for the holistic development of the
students
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 need to
study
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 all
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 equally at
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school
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level
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. Later on, upon admission to the colleges,
students
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 can select the
subjects
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 of their choice and can explore them
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. At that
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 they are mature enough to decide their
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 for themselves. At
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 the student may not know what his real interests are.
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, nowadays, the job market is very demanding and the recruiters select
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 who are skilled in various fields. Having the basic knowledge of varied
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 during
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time
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 definitely widens the horizons for the
students
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. To add to it, it is a well-known fact that most
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 are related to each other in some way or the other.
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, a basic knowledge of mathematics is needed to excel in computer languages.
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, I believe that it is up to the teachers to develop the interest of the
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 in any subject.
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, during my
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 days, my history teacher was so good that a monotonous and repetitive subject like history was the favourite subject of the whole class. In conclusion, I believe that
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school
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level
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 as they are not mature enough to know their real interests at
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the school
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level
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 and broad
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 needed for their holistic development.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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