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Many companies use advertisement to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or bad thing to the society?

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In recent years, many companies using advertisements to promote their brand and increase their sales. There are many reasons why
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 essay, I will depict them and explain why I think the benefits of
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 trend outweigh its drawbacks. Advertisement is a very strong marketing strategy followed by companies. If an advertisement is reached to potential customers, that product would be sold out form the shops. Advertisements can make
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 a strong mark on sales and
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 the reason why companies invest millions of
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 on advertisements. Today, they have different options like websites, social networking sites, television programs, posters and many mediums to advertise their product. Public use these mediums more frequently so, they are easy and efficient ways to reach the public. What makes a customer buy a new product? A good advertisement. There many creative directors who work for companies to market their products effectively. An advertisement should grab the attention of customers within a short time. It should create an impact
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 mind that it is an essential item to buy, even they don't need it truly. The opponents of advertisements argue that
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 is not good for the public and companies are selling goods which are not necessary to the customers. They
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 opine that some advertisements creating a bad impact on children.
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, many people argue that customers will know about products and its use only through the advertisements. From what has been discussed, one can not only identify the significance of the advertisements
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 understand why its drawbacks of
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