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All children should be made to wear school uniform. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I strongly agree that children should wear
school
uniform
 ,
this
 is because
school
uniform
 is very important in making all the children equal at
school
,
also
 the children will learn how to dress in
s
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mart way and how to be disciplined . The main reason why
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 agree with
this
 statement is
because
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school
uniform
 means equality to all the children at
school
, all the children wearing the same so you can’t differentiate between the rich and the poor.
for example
, if there was no
school
uniform
 some of the children can come to
schoo
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school
 in new or fancy clothes and others come to
school
 in old clothes ,
this
 will have a bad influence for the children with old clothes
then
 they will have a bad self
steem
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esteem
 and they
maybrefuse
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may refuse
 to come to
school
 .
Also
school
uniform
 is very important in the shape of
school
 and it will give the children
the
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 sense of responsibility towards there
school
.
furthure
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further
 more the children will learn how to dress in a smart way , and by having the
school
 logo in the
uniform
 it will be very easy which child belongs to which
school
.
Also
school
uniform
are
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 very important for parents financially , they will save money .
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instead
 of buying multiple clothes for
school
 during the year they will buy the
uniform
 and stick to it. To conclude , I completely agree that children should wear
school
uniform
 , its very important for
the
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children equality in
school
 and
theire
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their
there
 behaviour and important for the parents financially .
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