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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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It is important for people to consider which type of accomodation fits more with their life style. While some believe that it is better living in a
house
, there are those who feel that dwelling an
apartment
 is more advantageous.
This
 essay will explain why I reckon that the benefits of living in a
house
 outweigh the drawbacks, when compared to life in an
apartment
. Considering
firstly
 the negatives of houses, generally they are more spacious, and it means that they demand more work to do and time dedication to take care of it. It is
also
 because normally there are more plants, gardens and trees in houses, and these beings demand specific care to the
house
 owners.
Secondly
,
this
 type of accommodation might be less safer than apartments. When people leave their houses alone, usually there are not any neighbor who can take a look at the
house
, whereas in
apartment
 all the neighbors take care of each others accommodations, because they are closer.
However
, you have several more possibilities when you live in a place with more space,
such
 in houses.
This
 is because space is fundamental to able people to explore and practice activities.
For instance
, in houses you can create vegetable gardens; construct pools where people can swim, sunbathe and have a good time; practice joinery, make parties with a lot of people, etc.
Besides
, when somebody is passing her days in a
house
, she is so much more connected with the surroundings: she can see the sky, watch the sunrise, the moon, the stars.
As a result
,
this
 can definitely change moods and humors, developing the sensation of fulfillment and happiness in individuals. In conclusion, I am convinced that the advantages of space and connectedness with the environment that come with living in a
house
 outweigh the disadvantages of less housework and less security in comparison with living in an
apartment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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