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After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a popular trend when young people prefer to have a gap
year
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 after their graduation and spend it on
traveling
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 or working.
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 I support the idea of visiting different places during a free
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, I think that sometimes working can be more useful. On the one hand, every person needs sometimes some time to clear their mind, and
traveling
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 is a golden solution to do
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. Taking a trip helps students set aside future worries, and that will help them to understand what they really want in their lives. A good example of
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 is the brother of a friend of mine. He had
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 an opportunity and after that, he decided to not get any high education at all. Fortunately, he hasn't any regrets.
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, to earn some money and get useful
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 by working can be more productive for making an important decision about the future. If some person gets outside comfort zone, it shows to
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 person how exactly
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 world works.
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, it will make a future choosing a profession more reasonable.
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, in
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 a country as Belarus, only rich people can afford to travel during a gap
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, so working is a good choice to get a real
experience
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. Look at me,
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. I had
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 an
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. I worked as an assistant of an economist in a small company, and it helped me to get my profession. I studied the economy at university. To conclude, despite the fact that I agree with the idea that
traveling
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 is a magnificent choice to spend a free
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 after
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graduation, I assume that in some cases a real work can give to young people more
experience
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 and ideas.
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