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In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The modern cities are continuously changing since lifestyle has evolved into a new concept where the people move to the big cities to get a job and to have more
further
 opportunities.
Moreover
, the students move to
this
 megalopolis to study in a well-known and high teaching university.
Therefore
, these working-cities are becoming overpopulated and new places need to be built to supply to foreign people. Where the space is not available, the municipality has to wreck old buildings and create a modern version of them.
Firstly
, I would explain
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several drawbacks for the demolition. Old structures bring with them the tory, arts and culture.
For example
, if the colosseum goes down the Rome wouldn't be the same
city
. It takes over a huge history on how it was built, for what purpose and how it works.
Thus
, the cultural part would be the major disadvantage to get down old structures.
Additionally
, the beauty of a
city
 would dramatically get worse. From my personal experience, if you take a walk in Vienna it will charm you for the extraordinary old style. While, in Washington DC, as a new
city
, the modern structures are not facing at all. In conclusion, the negative aspects overcome the positive ones and the government should not think about creating new housing for foreign people while the reason why they go there. As I mentioned above, a major of moving is due to
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orking position.
Thus
, I would encourage the government to try to spread the company among the country and give them a financial reason to move away from the
city
, keeping the beautiful old building where they are.
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