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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees work for three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this?

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Some employers nowadays offer an opportunity to work four days a week rather than five. Researches established that the minority of companies which chose to shorten a working week have increased productivity that their competitors. I totally agree and believe that other businesses should follow their lead. At
first
, not only increased productivity is a major factor,
moreover
 stress is reduced which results in mentally stabled workers. Employees focus and dedicate more time to complete their tasks since they are benefited with an extra day off. So satisfied are employees with their schedules that they start to achieve better results and aim for greater goals.
For example
, large corporation Google
that is
 known around the world offers flexible schedules.
Consequently
, workers not only succeed at work but
also
 invent new ways to improve the business, as they are not experiencing any more pressure.
Moreover
, employees have an opportunity to spend time with the most valuable people in their life, family. Unfortunately, in most cases,it is hard to keep a life-work balance. Individuals are either get too much focused on their job or their loved ones. A great way to fix
this
 issue would be to provide a convenience to choose a day off.
For instance
, one of the family members can be off on Mondays and another one of Fridays.
Therefore
,
this
 will help many families to have a strong bond between each member. Overall, I believe that the flexibility of companies has a beneficial impact on their’s employees. It might seem that productivity might be affected,
however
, in the long run,employers will be benefited with ambitious and enthusiastic workers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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