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Supermarkets should only sell food products from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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In recent years, there has been a dramatic increase in selling imported
food
 products in supermarkets.
Although
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 those products are expensive than the local products, customers are buying them. There are many reasons why
this
 is happening. In
this
 essay, I will depict them and discuss my views on
this
 trend. Supermarkets have become available to the public all over the world. They always try to attract customers
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 a wide range of products and effective marketing. Today, importing some
food
 materials from the other countries and marketing them as a fancy product is a marketing strategy. Customers buy them just because they want to try new products and they are brainwashed by the supermarkets as they
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very healthy.
For example
, some Asian countries' climates didn't support fruits like apple and berries, but they are imported from other countries and marketed as healthier than the local fruits which are not true. People buy them and ignore the products available locally.
This
 trend will not only affect the people buying them, but
also
 the local farmers. Farmers who cultivate local fruits will face huge losses
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 because they sell them for
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less price.
This
 will
also
 affect the local economy. Many economists
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 believe that selling only local
food
 products will increase the local GDP up to five per cent which will great for the countries economy.
On the other hand
, imports and exports are extremely crucial for the economy as well, but they should never affect the local market which is a backbone for the country. From what has been discussed, one can not only identify the reasons for reducing the imports of the
food
 from other countries but
also
 understand why the benefits of
this
 trend are no match for its drawbacks.
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