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From a decade, the rate of juvenile delinquency has been increasing day by days all over the world.
Although
there is a number of factors which directly give birth to various crimes due to influence by social media and less attention devoted by parents,
however
,
this
practice can be resolved by monitoring and controlling the access of social network.
This
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To begin
with, the main reason for increased offences rates is excessive use of social media where children see
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lethora of negative news or posts which directly effect on their mind.
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, they follow those shortcut paths or ways to achieve money, and due to peer influence or pressure
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they commit
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rime. What is more, as parents are quite busy in their work and household lives, they rarely got time to spend with their
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monitoring the activities of juveniles. In loneliness and detachment
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they come under the bad companies, as a consequence, they become offensive.
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, there is certainly a number of measurements to mitigate the aforementioned offences.
Firstly
, even though using electronic gadgets become a part and parcel of children's daily life, parents should monitor the activities and time they spend on the usage so that they could not explore bad stuff on internet,
thus
, educating them to follow the right paths to achieve their goals.
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, here both government and parents should restrict
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social media usage which directly
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the mindset of adolescents. Giving less access to negative news and
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peer
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will change their mind ultimately. To recapitulate,
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the potential factors behind the escalating rates of juvenile's offences which highly effected by
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sage of social media and minor company by parents which can be eliminated to some extent by
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and guiding them.
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