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Question--Some people say that TV Advertisement have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views , give your own opinion and include examples from your experience

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Nowadays, Advertisement plays a crucial role to promote any kind of
business
. It is believed by some that these commercials are extremely useful for
business
, While others have an opposite
view
. I agree with the
first
view
. In
this
 essay, I would shed light on both sides and justify my
view
. There are certain reasons to support my
view
. The
first
 point of prime importance is promotions because adverts have a huge impact on viewers mind, Which is highly beneficial to promote any products.
For example
, With the use of a smart advertisement the company can make a bumper profit like Coca Cola company, Which spend around it,s 50% of the annual budget on
TV
 advertisement. Another point in the list is these
TV
 commercials help to provide knowledge about new products and organizations.
In addition
, The University of Toronto did great research and found that 80% to new companies start their
business
 with the use of television advert because people in today's time really pay more attention to these online advertisements to get knowledge about the latest products.
On the other hand
, there are some people who contradict the above said because they assert that companies dose to give full information about their parts. They just show the bright side of the products on
this
TV
 broadcast, Which is sometimes not helpful for users. To cite an example, Many big companies hire famous film stars to promote their items, but most of these celebrities never use these products and they dose not have any information about it. To conclude, I would like to state that there are both sides of the above-said question.
However
, If I have to choose one,
Then
 I believe that
TV
 advertisements have more benefits than it,s drawbacks because it helps in many ways to promote
business
.
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