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Today people are living in a throwaway society where they use things for a short time only and then throw them away. What are the causes of this and what problems can it lead to?

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resent time, humans are living in
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 world where they think that all things are disposable. Folks dump things plainly not thinking about the consequences it might lead.
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Mother Nature.
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innovation
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uman mind is brilliant and creative enough to invent things that can make our lives convenient.
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plastic
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 live without. Indeed,
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our society is boundless. In spite of the countless contribution of
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society, it has
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 the environment. Burning
plastic
 material causes air pollution which is a danger to the ozone layer that protected the earth from
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corching heat of the sun. The oceans and other body of water are packed with
plastic
 materials and is very injurious to aquamarine life. In comparison with the past, old folks used to treasure everything they have. In my opinion,
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oldfangled
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 today's generation. We opted for comfort and convenience but in reality
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we are destroying our nature. We must take into account the future generation. Overall, in spite of the convenience of disposable materials can offer, people must bear in mind that proper disposal plays a crucial role to the environment, and for the future generation to still eye the beauty of Mother Nature.
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