In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to find part-time jobs. Some think this is a good development while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

A progressive career demands
work
ethics and experience. Though short term assignments
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to the resume, critics do not find it promising.
Project
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of short duration provides an opportunity to experience the
responisbility
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responsibility
and gain knowledge at the same
time
. It helps in building
work
ethics which are vital for a professional to succeed in the corporate environment.
Such
tasks
also
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beneficial for implementing
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theoritical
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theoretical
learning into a
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situation which definitely counts towards building a strong profile. Several lines of evidence reflect that most of the renowned executives and researchers highlight their potential through
such
tasks.
However
, some people believe that they are too brief to make a considerable difference. Employers give priority to the skills as compared to other traits, and it takes long hours at offices to gain. Some people suggest that it takes
time
to adjust and understand the task before actually contributing towards it.
Therefore
, a long term job of at least a year or so is necessary to hone the skills. Many recruiters do not count
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time
work
as experience, and
thus
does not prove useful.
On the contrary
, it is challenging to find
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time
work
for the freshers, and they need to find a break in the industry. Teenagers are most preferred by the organizations offering limited duration jobs as they are agile, and even agree to
work
for
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wages. I believe that it is
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beneficial
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both for the employer and the young professionals, as they mutually meet the needs of each other. Little steps towards success surely
gives
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confidence and support for a rewarding career. Contractual jobs are a great start for the young workforce as it builds both
work
ethics, and skills for a gainful long term career, even though it might not catch the eye of few job providers.
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