In some countries, celebrities can now earn more than senior politicians. what might be the reason for this? is this positive or negative development?
Celebrities have reached remarkable net worths and most of them are earning more than politicians who have rich experience they have shown that they pursue their own interests by increasing the size of their wallets.
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This
is mainly because society
assign
more Change the verb form
assigns
value
to a famous person contribution
rather than a politician contribution
. From my point of view, this
is a positive development because the
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society
needs to decrease the value
that we have assigned to the politicians
duties.
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politician's
politicians'
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of all, highly recognized people have contributed in some way to the community, in other words
, society
have
assigned to Change the verb form
has
this
contribution
a value
which is greater than a politician contribution
. For instance
, Neil de Grass is a famous scientist, he has reached 2 billion of
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this
money in further
research efforts to acquire new knowledge about the universe. Conversely
, politicians around the globe have participated in many frauds which have represented more than 100 billion of
dollars.
In my opinion, It is a positive development that politics do not produce better profits than other activities because community Verify preposition usage
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decision making
processes need a new approach without intermediaries which means without Add a hyphen
decision-making
policitians
. Politician functions Correct your spelling
politicians
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For instance
, nowadays we have technologies to replace politicians with artificial intelligence services. This
algorithms are able to take our individuals interests and make decisions for the common welfare in a community. By doing Change the determiner
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this
, we could maximize the social benefit involved in the government budget and we could reach a better life quality.
In conclusion, celebrities are making more money than senior politicians, due to the fact that people in general
assign more Add the comma(s)
, in general,
value
to a highly recognized person contribution
rather than a politician contribution
. I believe that this
is a positive development because the
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society
needs to assign less value
to the politicians
duties.Change to a genitive case
politician's
politicians'
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