In many countries, children are engaged paid in some kind of paid work. some people regard this as completely wrong. while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is an irrefutable fact that, in
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modernized era, numerous children are doing paid
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in different fields including restaurants, cafes or more.
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, some masses consider that it is a completely wrong trend for the development of the children while others are saying it is a huge benefit to the youngsters. I staunchly believe that paid
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is harmful
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the upcoming growth of children. It is rightly said that children gain valuable experience from
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task. It is undoubtedly true
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there
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also
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a myriad of detrimental factors behind
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phenomenon. The most prevalent is a bad effect on the growth of the children. It is not a good path for the upcoming future. They do lots of hard
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in
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kinds of places including dishes, mopping, cleaning, and so on but
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they get lower amounts of money from their honour. Children become
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minded after doing
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kind of job.
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, In China, Chinese students do not have a bright future after doing
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kind of job in past times. They are unemployed mostly. According to my perception, there are conspicuous detrimental factors regarding
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paid
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. The most prevalent one is literacy and unemployment, which have a negative impact on children’s lives. We can see that children attain huge amounts of loss in their higher education. They do not care about their bright future or feel more satisfaction with paid
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.
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, they should choose the right path in life and take higher positions in life after completing their study including
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octor, air force and so on. In the end,indeed, there are huge drawbacks of paid
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for students. So, they ought to leave
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wrong path and take a new turning point in their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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