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Some people think that because of email,social media and telephones, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,communication system s are becoming more upgraded and globalised making it easy for people to connect others from
one
 place to another. They often believe that
this
 has had a negative impact on the face to face communication. In my opinion,I strongly agree
on
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this
 point. In general, due to the availability of social media, email and internet, people are being more advanced as each day pass by.It is because of the following reasons.
Firstly
, through emails and WhatsApp, we no longer need to write letters as we did in the past.
Instead
, drafting a mail through cell phones or computer screens take s less time to get delivered to the receiver.
Also
,chats and video calls have been enabled to connect a person from
one
 part of the world to another and know the whereabouts of our friends and relatives.
Secondly
, people are updated with everyday news and gossips through various websites.
Moreover
,shopping and education have
also
 been digitalised over a few years.Just
one
 click and that particular product
is
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 in front of us within no time.
In addition
, online classes allow the parents to monitor their children and interact with their teachers live.
Hence
, there are numerous advantages
of
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this
 subject. Meanwhile, mishandling of
such
 technological aspects can be harmful.
To begin
 with, people turns slothful and good-for-nothing if they are addicted recklessly. People cannot be over-dependent on social media as it affects our work and educational lives.Friendships and teacher-student interaction
gets
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 reduced into small screens and people continue to live in a bubble.
Therefore
,
such
 impacts can
also
 affect
one
's life in many ways. to summarise, a modern communication system is indeed very powerful and have a few negatives. But when it is used in a proper way
this
 could help to build a better place.
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