Modern culture around the world have become similar when compared to the past. What are the reasons. Is it a positive development or a negative development, in your opinion.

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There is no question that the process of the globalisation has changed
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the traditional features of each
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have undergone
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I'm willing to provide causes of
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trend and reasons to support my opinion. There are certain factors of
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, it is undeniable that, marketing encourages consumers to utilize the same
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products despite
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their location and cultural preferences. A case in point would be the rapid spread of fast food, people influenced by
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eat hamburgers and sandwiches
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of their traditional dishes.
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, it became popular to travel abroad, where tourists and citizens of a hosting
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experience the exchange of customs and traditions.
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but not least, nowadays people started to live in nuclear
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families
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of living in communities.
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, the older generation can not transfer their customs to the younger one's. In turn to demerits of culture
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similarity
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I can provide the following arguments. Countries which emulate features of others' are likely to
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their zest and become
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, India is famous for its rich cultural heritage;
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, travellers from all other the world are dreaming to explore
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recent years,
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ast modern development of the
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the flow of visitors as many of them now choose more authentic places.
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, the
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dissapears
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disappears
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citizens
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as they gathering together to celebrate them. Remembering events which were precursors to
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articular holiday, they rise their sense of patriotism. In conclusion, it is possible to say that marketing, tourism and nuclear families gave birth to cultures identity. In my opinion,
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their uniqueness and patriotism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations
  • Consumerism
  • Cross-cultural interactions
  • Cultural diversity
  • Communication technologies
  • Cultural imperialism
  • Global community
  • Cultural richness
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